Persuasive+Writing

__**pizza is the ultimate fast food**__ Pizza is the best fast food because it is a lot more filling then most other fast foods and it has more variety of flavour then pies and chips. they also are a lot more tasty and better for you then pie. Pizzas can bee made at home easier and you have to buy any other fast food at stores but pizza when you make it at home you can make even more flavours. Another thing is that pizzas are bigger therefore they last longer then pies that you eat straight away. But a pizza can feed four people and a pie can only feed one. Another great thing is that you can even change the crusts you can get huge crusts. Now you can even get the crusts filled with melted cheese!! There are so many types of pizzas it’s crazy! So the pizza over all is the best fast food because they are healthier, more filling and you can make them at home.

REFLECTION:i think that i did the persuade part of it well but could have put a lot more e in to it and tryed to make it in to parigraphs and done olot more writing in. and make it looked a bit more interesting to the reader

MY GOALS:my goals are to next time make it alot more interesting and easer to read also i would put in alot more interesting and perswasive writing .also i would put my writing in to paragraphs to make it easer to read

parent coment. An important part of making a body of writing easier to read is capital letters and correct spelling. You need to put more effort into these areas first I think Kaela. Is a pizza FAST food if you make it at home??? I agree it's definately better for you though. :) Well done! I loook forward to your piece of writing, as I'm sure there will be much improvement. ;)

__   School should start at 10am    __ S chool should start at 10am because it would make it easer to get up in the morning for the kids and the parents. As well as that the house in the mornings for parents would be a lot more peaceful. The teachers would benefit from this to because the children could be easer to handle in the class room. I f school started at 10 am the children that go to these schools would be also healthier the reason being is that in adults it can cause drowsy driving, stress anger and even road rage. Witch can lead to serious injury even death! Believe it or not it also weakens the immune system and makes it easer for you to catch devisees and disorders ranging from the common cold to diabetes and even cancer! I f this change is made us kids could spend more time with our family’s and get to know more people out of school and then go to school and make friends there to .it can also help with our social life with our friends and family’s. A nd if it starts at 10 am it would not matter that the children did not do as much work because they can just stay for a little bit at the end of the day when most parents are at work any way. Also if it ended later in the day it would prevent some attacks on the children when they are left home alone. S o over all I think that school starting at 10 am is a great idea because it can help students do better at school because of more sleep and it could also save lives!

reflection:i think i have had much improvement since the last piece of writing that was put on here.i think i have even improved on my perswasive words in the short time.